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Demande de correction d’un texte en anglais (activité dans un musée)

zelenkas

Bonjour, dans le cadre d'une évaluation finale, Je dois rendre un dossier portant sur une activité faite dans un musée.
Mon anglais étant particulièrement faible, j'aimerais avoir une correction, même minimum, de mon travail.
Merci beaucoup :

In link with the theme 3 to French academic program Roman Empire in the ancient world. In CM1, student worked about Cesar and conquest. In secondary school, they will be continuing in this subject. That with we have a project about Roman ancient.
In first, children worked and learned in classroom about that. To continue, we decided to go in a Museum.
My activity in the museum is about discovery many famous objects. For that, the activity we propose is a treasure hunt. The objective of this activity is to discover the diversity and richness of British Museum. Through the treasure hunt, students will discover the different rooms of the museum and they will be guided to the most important objects and works of art.

Students will have a document with several questions. Some questions will be in English, others in French. Through these questions, they will search for particular objects, search for information on works of art or find information on the museum.
An example of a question: Now you are in the last room. Look for a human-shaped object, painted in different colours. What is it?
Students who validate the course will arrive in front of Bronze head of Augustus. A correction of the different answers will be made on this occasion with the class group.
An evaluation, in relation to the skills worked during the sequence, will be done in class at the return of the trip.

We choose British museum for many reasons
First of all, the British Museum is one of must famous museum in the world. In 2013 the museum received a record 6.7 millions visitors. It’s the touristic site the most visited in United Kingdom. Its permanent collection numbers some 8 million works.
Furthermore, the Department of Greece and Rome at the British Museum has one of the most comprehensive collections of antiquities from the Classical world, with over 100,000 objects.
Finally, the visit of the museum is part of a linguistic trip. Students will be immersed in a context favoring the practice of English

fidji45

Bonjour

Quel âge avaient les élèves dont vous aviez la charge : une fois vous dites children (soit des enfants) une fois students (qui sont des "élèves" dans un lycée et aussi des étudiants)
Merci

mikomasr

Bonjour,

Si chacun te fait un paragraphe, avec un peu de chance ton texte sera entièrement révisé. Je te propose de revoir le premier :

In link with the theme 3 to French academic program Roman Empire in the ancient world. In CM1, student worked about Cesar and conquest. In secondary school, they will be continuing in this subject. That with we have a project about Roman ancient.

En lien avec ne marche pas. Tu peux dire as regards, regarding, concerning (si c'est bien là l'idée que tu souhaitais exprimer, j'avoue que ce n'est pas tout à fait clair).
The French academic program
The Roman Empire
Et bien sûr la phrase n'est pas complète, il n'y a pas de verbe.

In CM1, students au pluriel
Work on et non about, mais il vaudrait mieux dire study
Caesar and his conquest?
They will continue studying this subject, ou à la limite continue with, mais pas in.
Je n'ai pas compris la phrase avec le projet, donc je ne peux pas faire de suggestion.